Tyburn & Modified Tyburn- Time

Fleeting Cheating Greeting Beating Time is fleeting, its always cheating First a nice greeting then a beating ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Modified Tyburn: The one above follows the rules this one doesn't. Which one sounds better to you? Fleeting Gone Lost Hope Time is fleeting, quickly gone Leaving in it's place lost hope Tyburn rules: Tyburn Poem is a six line poem consisting of 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9 syllables. The first four lines rhyme and are all descriptive words. The last two lines rhyme and incorporate the first, second, third, and fourth lines as the 5th through 8th syllables. May be on any subject.